July 15th, 2016 at 05:56pm
I love how everything is worded, it's very well written. I agree with @ the cosmos on the stealthy sneaking part, maybe you should try to reword it.
When you say innocents had died at his hands I would recommend saying innocent people, but that is just my opinion.
I love the overall plot of this. I love the minimal dialogue along with so much description. These are some of my favorite stories. You have definitely peaked my interest.
Layout / Summary
The layout for this is very simple and classy -- works very well with the context of the lyrics that you've used! It's very easy to read and isn't at all distracting, so it's definitely a massive boost in terms of graphic design for that!
The summary itself is very small and doesn't give away too much, but the lyrics you've used in the summary are probably my favourite C&C lyrics ever so I'm a fan of that, ha. I'm also interested to see how you work this alongside the fandom you've chosen because the lyrics are so very apt for Bucky, I think.
Content
I've always been really interested in Bucky as a character, because he just seems so real to me. He's got this inner conflict that's really interesting to read about as well and I think you've captured this beautifully here. You write about how he has this push between the world that he used to know and the world that he now knows -- I think that's a really lovely addition, because it just brings that conflict that we all know and love to the forefront of the story, and it just makes him seem more... I don't know, human? That sounds really silly, but it removes him from this traditional role of 'villain' and pushes him into this tortured soul role that I think he really suits. You've definitely managed to capture his character really well, especially in the first paragraph or so.
What I especially love about this piece, though, is this sense of non-resolution. Normally, you get a resolution of some sort that ends the piece, but you've just got this open-ended final paragraph. We don't know what happens, we don't know whether he's going to succeed. There's this sense of desperation and a sense that his fight is futile. It works in so well with this idea that Hydra's grip on him hasn't been fully released, and that he's still struggling between this super-soldier and human split that he seems to have. It makes for a really good read.
Concrit
The only suggestion I have has already been mentioned below -- 'stealthy' isn't really needed before 'sneaking'. Aside from that, I didn't have too many complaints at all!
Overall
This is a really strong piece. I love the mix between this conflict and the concern that he has for Hydra. The entire piece shows this struggle between the more human side of Bucky and the side that's loyal to Hydra and it's so heartbreaking to read through, especially being a fan of the character. Stunning job!