Down This Road - Comments

Alright, time to try again since my comment didn't submit, what a bummer.

I love the layout that's used for the story. It seems to describe the mood of the story & it's easy to read. The summary was simple but it certainly caught my attention and made me want to read more. I'm not a fan of the POV that was used, but for this story it seems to work out well.

At the beginning, they seemed happy. Everything was going smoothly for them & they even found a house together. Although, with the opening line it seemed like he's used that before. So that's a bit of a red flag. But in the end, he cheated on her and that was a low blow. Makes me wonder if it was with the girl next door. Ha. anyways, Well done!!!

I love this!

It's so impactful despite it being short. And the atmosphere you had established within the stories through your words, I can feel it. Like how the main character was obviously gone for him. And how even though the beginning seems like they're so in love, you manage to leave that feeling where I know something bad, something sad is going to happen.

And then he left! He left! It's heartbreaking but it's so beautifully written.

This made me so sad, oh my goodness. I've lowkey been waiting for you to post the chapter for this story and it definitely lived up to what I imagined it would be. And the layout is gorgeous, of course, I can't even

I really like how you formatted it, with the italicized dialogue starting a new section and then the descriptions/emotions/what not underneath. It was really cool to read and I think it helped make the whole emotion of the piece flow well, if that makes sense. Like it started out so sweet and then got so sad at the end and it ran together really nicely. The fact that it was short worked so well for it, I think. It was just to the point and raw and fantastic.

I'm kind of sad that I'm also in the contest that you entered this in because I don't stand a chance against this Fantastic job!