All Is Fair in War - Comments

@ mymomislysolcrazy
Thank you for the kind comment. I intentionally left the back story vague. You're not supposed to know who the characters are, the actions of their past, or why the are fighting. You root for the main character, but question if you should. Are they a misunderstood outcast seeking revenge? Or did they commit unspeakable crimes? Was their goal to live a quiet and happy life or destroy mankind? I wanted to write a short story where you question all you know about who and what makes someone a hero or a villain.

I like this. It's very engaging because it throws you in the midst of the action and I couldn't help but read more to figure out who would win the natural power struggle against good vs. evil. I love how it ends with a twist, but I may be biased since I tend to throw plot twists or a lot of plot shifts into it. Constructively, I could say that I did find myself wanting to know why they were fighting. If it were my story I would probably add a little more detail into the thoughts of the character to make why they were there in the first place clearer, but it could also stand alone as it is. Other than that, I only have to say that I might be wrong, but I think that in block paragraphs there should be a extra line space between paragraphs. I think that would make it a little easier to read, I went down two lines on accident once or twice. Overall this is a great little story about hero vs. villian! Good job!