June 16th, 2017 at 08:55am
@ frank castle.
Thank you so much for the feedback! And I will probably go back through and edit extensively if I do make this a longer story. I would probably expand more on the background in future chapters because its just a preference for me to draw the readers in for the first chapter I was thinking that this might be the background story for the future chapters though. I will decide whenever I get my next prompt if I will continue it! But again thank you so much for your feedback! It's always appreciated!
That was actually a rambling of a paragraph, that’s how upside I ended up being at the end.
But, in a more coherent fashion, I liked how you executed this. At first, I thought that maybe you should have spread the timeline out more so Michael’s outburst didn’t seem so out of left field but then I kind of realized that Megan wouldn’t have picked up on any vibes anyway. She was so caught up in perfecting her first big role that she just saw Michael as this, well, pompous ass, as she affectionately put it. So having it happen so suddenly and quickly actually was a good way to go about it because as a reader, it definitely left an impression on me.
Well done!