My Way Home Is Through You - Comments

The sky was already beginning to turn dark and it would soon be night. As we drove through the city, I looked around, taking in all of the beauty that had been robbed from me. I saw buildings, cars, people; all of it was so far away. My life had been so different before that day. I had gone on an amazing adventure with my friends, but now all I could think about was how much I missed them. You should get online marketing assignment help now through https://www.assignmentgeek.com.au/marketing-assignment-help/ website which is really authentic one for this work.

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Layout / Summary

The layout has this kind of trippy feel to it that I really like. The only suggestion I have is that the semi-transparent background makes it a little difficult to read, so I'd suggest maybe turning the transparency down a little bit more to alleviate that. Your summary made me giggle a little bit because of the whole Gerard as a sassy redhead thing, but it also makes me excited for what's to come!

Content

I like Larken as a character. Every time I've read an MCR fic, any girls involved seem to have this devil-may-care attitude, or are extremely reckless in their actions. I like that Larken is entirely different to this -- she's collected, professional and almost entirely calm. She's got this side to her that I feel wants to desperately kick out and be reckless, but she's overruling that and I like that she is entirely different to the other female MCs I see in MCR fanfiction. She's a welcome breath of fresh air, and that's definitely something that I really enjoyed about this piece.

Admittedly, I didn't like Gerard's character too much. I'm not sure if it's what you were going for, but his actions just make me cringe, and instantly I'm on Larken's side as opposed to Gerard's. I softened to him a little bit when he had his heart-to-heart with Larken but then he just dropped the ball again by almost pouncing on her. I definitely have a love-hate relationship with his character here, and your writing of his character is definitely interesting.

Concrit

I noticed a few spelling and grammar errors throughout, so I'd suggest doing another comb through for those. I've detailed the ones I noticed below:

ciggarets [chapter one] should be cigarettes
He peeled of a worn... [chapter one] should be He peeled off a worn...
Latte's [chapter one] should be lattes
I know your the " popular one"... [chapter two] should be I know you're the "popular one"...
Don't take it to personally... [chapter two] should be Don't take it too personally...
Larken couldn't decide of she... [chapter three] should be Larken couldn't decide if she...
Because your warm and bright... [chapter five] should be Because you're warm and bright
...if I got to close you... [chapter five] ...if I got too close you...
As she suspected it was Ray... [chapter six] should be As she suspected it was Jay...
...she caght a peek... [chapter six] should be ...she caught a peek...
If he really wanted too... [chapter six] should be If he really wanted to...

Overall

There are a lot of grammar and spelling errors throughout that did ruin the story's effect a little bit, but aside from that, I think you've got a good thing started here! Just pay a little more attention to errors throughout and keep up the good characterisation!

Ohhhhhhhh I already like this. Mhm, I feel it.