Brain Sad - Comments

@ DressedInDecay
Thank you so much! Will be updating soon (tonight probably).

Again, you capture the differences between illnesses in a spot-on, candid way. Honestly, if this were a novel, I would have devoured the entire thing by now. I can't wait for the next chapter!

@ lungsmoke
thank you so much for this feed back, I'll definitely go through everything again to try and pick out any grammatical errors!

With Chapter 4, it's a dream sequence, so it's a dream (or whatever) going on inside her head after she's been medicated and in hospital. That's why I've written it in a more dramatic style and made it more surreal than the rest.

I'm super thrilled that you enjoyed and and it will be updated as of right now actually as I have the chapters on hand. Hope you keep reading and enjoy the rest of the story!

Happy writing!

I think this is such an interesting concept!! I don't think I would ever have thought of this, and it really drew me in. Actually, I thought the title was great, too, as it made me click on teh story. I don't know if you're looking for crit, so I'm really sorry beforehand if this is unwanted, but there were some grammatical errors which I thought disrupted the flow of the words a bit whilst I was reading. The other thing is, although it's probably just me because my eyes are kind of fucked, but the colours of the layout made it a bit difficult to read. Nevertheless, on to the good bits:

CH1 — I love "unconventional" chapters, and so the fact that you included an article in your first chapter was a definite bonus for me.

CH2 — The last sentence! You know in tv shows / movies where the person's soul departs their body? I really got that visualisation, but reversed, from the last sentence. There's also something that gives me a really restless vibe from this chapter, and I like how short and sweet it is.

CH3 — I like the relationship between Harper and her mum. I saw a bit of how close they were in the first chapter, but I feel like I'm being told that they're more distant in this one. LOL @ "the f-bomb" though! I like how I get to know the characters a bit more before I also get to see how you've decided to turn depression into a physical illness.

CH4 — This is really interesting! Tbh Harper seems a bit dramatic, but then I suppose if I was in her shoes, I'd be the same way. I can't really tell what's happening, but I'm guessing it's what's happening in her head after the seizure she had in chapter three?

Anyway, recc'd and subbed!

This is beautifully, and articulately written. It's interesting, and almost relieving, to read someone put into words how I feel on the inside, into a physical manifestation. I definitely can't wait to read more!