The Weeping Woman - Comments

Layout / Summary
The picture at the top of the layout really does set the tone tremendously well. Everything gels together really well when it comes to the actual layout itself. The summary has this really creepy tone to it, and it does make me rather amped-up going into the story itself.

Content
I love the way that you describe the woman's voice, and how the wind can't even mask the wails. It's very poetic, and definitely sets me right into the setting at the first instance. I've got this image of a ghostly-looking woman searching the waters for her children -- it's a really haunting image and it's one that I can definitely imagine I'll have nightmares about in the future!

I like that there seems to be two distinct parts to this story, even though it's so short -- you've got the information about the actual woman itself, and then you've got the act of her taking two boys (who I assume aren't hers) into the water as if she believes wholeheartedly it's the best thing for them. It's almost like she doesn't mean to kill them, she just wants some company. I've never found myself empathising with a ghost / demon creature in the past, but I definitely do in this instance, just in the way that you've written her lament so beautifully.

Concrit

dripping with water as it hang -- hang should be hung

Overall
This was haunting, melancholy and absolutely beautiful. Lovely job!

First things first, I apologize in advance if this is a crap comment. Comments are my weakness.

Continuing on! What a perfect picture! Captures the story and the legend so well. I love the overall darkness of the layout. It’s very pretty. And I’m glad you chose La Llorona because I have been fascinated by that legend for years.

And those poor babies! I assume they weren’t her actual children? I love the description of her and how she traps the poor children and lures them into the river. It gives her an almost fairy like spark too, since you know how they love to drag people into the bottom of rivers.

I loved it! Thank you so much for writing it! It was just what I was looking for! I’ll get back to you soon about the contest! ^.^

I wish I were on my laptop right now so I can leave a proper comment.

But that aside, this is nicely written. I like the atmosphere you've set within the story and it's definitely a huge mistake on my part for reading this just before I'm about to go to bed.

The story of a wailing woman has always frightened me since I was a child so this hit me quite deep.

All in all, I think you did good with this.