March 24th, 2017 at 05:05pm
I really love that this is written with text messages. It builds a lot of intrigue in just a few words, which makes it fun to read. I kept clicking for the next chapter, wanting to figure out why she was so scared of commit. I think this is really great so far, and I would love to see a sequel. I personally would stick with the text messages, with small bits of description as you have this now, and then for the sequel, do full chapters. I'd still keep thing relatively short though, maybe around a thousand words. That's just my opinion, though.
This is wonderful! Also, your layout is beautiful.
10/10
AMAZING JOB!