Strangers Like Me - Comments

@ Lover of Polka Dots
Thank you so much :) My tab button is broken at the moment but I will try other methods to space my paragraphs.

If not for that comment feed, I never would've found this story.

I really dig this idea and I've got my fingers crossed for a Tarzan/Jane romance. It may be too early for me to know much about Elizabeth so I'll wait for some more character development.

I would like spaces between the paragraphs as well. I can follow your writing well enough (thank you for keeping your sentences concise) but it'd be nice to have some room.

I'm reading this on my iPad so I can't see what layout you've got but otherwise, I'm going to subscribe and I'm excited to see where this goes.

The summary doesn't give a lot away so I really had no idea what this was going to be coming into it. Whenever I start a story, I'm a little iffy about "this is what I wanted" and "this is what really happened" openings, just because they're a bit too idealist for me.

Reading on, I quickly realized that there's no spaces between paragraphs or speech, which makes it really hard on the eyes. Especially since the background is yellow and the text is grey. Everything kind of blends together after awhile.

Your idea sounds really cool though. I've never read a story about a woman helping in Africa. What's even cooler is that I know what's to come.

In chapter two, I found it odd that the girl could speak and understand English. Maybe you should consider including a translator, or note that she's speaking their language. I love stories that have hints of realism, so that's just a suggestion.

This is a really interesting concept. I think if you clean it up a bit by spacing the paragraphs and speech and fixing the speech (if there's no tag after someone speaks, i.e., "he said", "she said", then it ends in a period. If there is, you put a comma), you'll have a pretty cool story.