July 22nd, 2016 at 11:11pm
I'm so into aliens right now (as I have 2 stories now that are dealing with this topic) so I definitely had to check this story out! And I must say I was not disappointed!
You do a great job of setting up the atmosphere of this story, and creating that calm nighttime feeling along with that air of creepiness that only the nighttime can bring. Your descriptions throughout this one-shot are just great and really help maintain the tone of the story! And because it's all gotta do with aliens, I almost have to wonder at the end if the main character was just simply having a nightmare or was actually abducted-- It really leaves you guessing!
The only other thing I want to add, is a few of the shorter sentences in the story feel kind of awkward and disjointed. I think the one that stood out the most to me as not really flowing well is in your third paragraph: A shadow emerged from the light to stand over him. A disfigured body. The second sentence just seems kind of awkward to me. I don't know. Now the more I read it, it kind of works. (Just ignore me).
Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this! Great job!
Anyways, Thanks for entering this in my contest. Was a good entry!! I enjoyed it.