I read your first chapter. I found you through the Story Comment Swap thread.
I like your layout. It's simple but it sets a nice tone that goes well with your writing. You have a way of describing things that doesn't necessarily allow me to see the story in my head, but I can feel the emotions you're trying to go for.
I do like the way you write, your sentences have a good flow. I do wish your first chapter paragraphs were separated like your second chapter paragraphs, but that's just me being nit-picky. I'm definitely going to finish reading the rest.
I like your layout. It's simple but it sets a nice tone that goes well with your writing. You have a way of describing things that doesn't necessarily allow me to see the story in my head, but I can feel the emotions you're trying to go for.
I do like the way you write, your sentences have a good flow. I do wish your first chapter paragraphs were separated like your second chapter paragraphs, but that's just me being nit-picky. I'm definitely going to finish reading the rest.