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This is really sad. I mean thinking your husband's cheating on you, only to find out someone else had taken over his mind/body, taking his place, it would be a lot to take in. This is a nice piece and I love it. I do agree with iron giant! that it felt bit rushed towards the end but this story was a nice one overall and I enjoy your writing style.

Fuck, straight off the bat, I know you're so talented. That first paragraph--love it. I just felt the need to comment on how good it was.

The whole thing, actually. It just feels so impactful. I can truly understand her pain.

The quick turn of emotion is a little weird though. There wasn't any thought process behind it, from what was written; she just got angry because he said something. Very strange to me, like going from 0-100 real quick.

Part of me wishes that it wasn't an alien story--but that's just me. I feel like it would be much more heavy and better if it were a simple story about a wife leaving her husband, because he had stopped loving her. Cudos, though. This is still a fantastic piece from beginning to "She left the room, left the house, left the divorce papers." I feel like the last few paragraphs beyond that aren't necessary.