On one hand, I love the premise you have for this story. The fairy tale-ish vibes you give off and how not every prince is as charming as he may seem, as you can see from how Rowland treats Annabelle. However I'm a bit put off by the lack of description in the story. The story seems to be too dialogue-driven to my liking and there are parts where I lost track on who's talking to whom. I suggest you describe more about her surrounding, using the five senses in your writing is often the way to go.
I definitely love the twist where not every happily ever after will truly end in happily ever after. There's always more than meets the eye, and Rowland is the perfect example of that. With a bit more description and a bit more backstory, I think this story has a lot of potential. Joshua does manage to get me interested to know more about his character and the part he will play in the future of the story.
On one hand, I love the premise you have for this story. The fairy tale-ish vibes you give off and how not every prince is as charming as he may seem, as you can see from how Rowland treats Annabelle. However I'm a bit put off by the lack of description in the story. The story seems to be too dialogue-driven to my liking and there are parts where I lost track on who's talking to whom. I suggest you describe more about her surrounding, using the five senses in your writing is often the way to go.
I definitely love the twist where not every happily ever after will truly end in happily ever after. There's always more than meets the eye, and Rowland is the perfect example of that. With a bit more description and a bit more backstory, I think this story has a lot of potential. Joshua does manage to get me interested to know more about his character and the part he will play in the future of the story.