January 22nd, 2018 at 10:48pm
Trouble Too - Comments
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I can't wait for more!January 19th, 2018 at 03:09am
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Amazing. Looking forward to more!February 27th, 2017 at 07:32pm
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Jackson is, exactly as you worded it, hot and cold. SO confusing. One second he wants her, the next second he is running away from her.
Max and Ash get on my nerves. They have very annoying and nagging qualities to them. I feel a larger sense of annoyance with them rather than caring for Lily.
Looking forward to reading more.October 3rd, 2016 at 09:47am -
Found this story and Im a bit fan, curious to read more!August 30th, 2016 at 10:03pm
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@ Writerx11x
Thanks for the feedback. I edited it a little bit. Lemme know if it's still unclear. I really do love the feedback.
August 5th, 2016 at 03:04pm -
@ So_What_16
It was just saying who she was waiting for that made that confusing. Maybe if that section was rewritten to remove his name and substitute something such as how she met this other guy it may work out betterAugust 4th, 2016 at 08:56pm -
@ Writerx11x
Sorry, it is weird I may have to do a rewrite. I will say she's not waiting for Ash. I thought starting where I started would be interesting but instead it made it confusing:P...August 4th, 2016 at 06:53pm -
I'm a little confused about this beginning. You mention her waiting for Ash howver that isn't who she lets in in the second chapter...August 4th, 2016 at 12:57pm
Working on it! Thanks for reading!