Nightline - Comments

I really really liked your summary. It was beautiful and simple.

Everything about this entry made my heart ache. I loved that you gave the readers details about Phil and his life throughout the story and not with an info dump. You slowly weaved through your plot with ease. I really liked the vibe you created surrounding Phil. I felt like crying at some parts.

I really liked how Chelsea played a significant role in this; her presence didn’t seemed force, but flowed nicely with Phil. I feel like her connection with the story really made an impact to the readers. I really loved how Phil became more open towards Chelsea towards the middle of the story, as he felt like he could trust her. You definitely made Phil stick into your audiences’ heads. You brought him to life with his trust for Chelsea and his ongoing strength. His situation really did make my so so sad. You had a wonderful entry. Great job!

That was terrifying.

The character development was amazing and just so intense. Will there be another chapter?

wow. You really mastered some beautiful character development and depth in just a few brief chapters, an in complete dialogue. I honestly didn't even feel like this was missing the descriptions because of how successfully you rounded out their interactions.

Wonderfully done, it's a very moving piece.

I'm sobbing uncontrollably.

This story is amazing and sad and ugh, it's just perfect.