August 31st, 2016 at 08:38pm
The amount of short, simple sentences in the summary is why I like it so much. It's as if you're listing facts about them (whoever they are), and then stating an observation about them - like how instead of being human, they are just shadows. It did a good job at giving a creepy feel to the story, and paired with the layout, I can only assume that this story isn't going to be all sunshine and rainbows.
prologue
I don't think it was a weird start to the story. It was interesting and mysterious. Not much is told through the prologue, which I feel is a good thing. You don't straight up give the readers a bunch of information, but just give enough to keep the reader wondering what on earth is happening and what the backstory to it is. I think this is a perfect beginning to what I believe will be a very good story.
This line gave me chills. And filled me with questions. How many spirits were there? What are they exactly? How was she captured? WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN NEXT?
- quote:
- She had become one of the forbidden spirits.
But seriously, I'm already in love with this. The plot, the little I know about it that is, looks like it's going to be very interesting and something I've never seen before. I can't wait to see what's next for this!
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! (:
@ aubs
Thank you!