The Fork and the Ladle - Comments

@ attackOFwaffle
Please do. The King would be honoured!

@ discoveringclouds
Thank you so much for your advice! Would you mind if I took this advice and added paragraphs and italicized text?

Dear attackofWaffle,

Great to see you again. We send greetings from the king, he does enjoy stories with unique humour and yours takes the noodle!

With every story the paragraph spacing can be unique, but it is important to leave a line between ideas. This way the reader has time to digest the idea. Like chewing between bites. Or landing between jumps.

Alas, poor Darlene tried to jump into narration. This could become quite a tragedy for you if you hadn't mentioned that to begin with. But if she insists on going on like this you can change narration by adding spaces and perhaps italicize her words, or all the narration.

Or for humours sake the main narrator could have been narrating out loud all along. The Knights believe this would allow Darlene to more logically be involved in the narration as she would hear it as well.

Interestingly your story leaves a curious note, how did our main narrator get his hands on that hot oily pasta? And why did Darlene hand it to him in the first place? Was he a thief that he had to be chased out or just too unruly not to chase out?

We definetly agree with the choice of Darlene for the name of the waitress, when she stops kicking old people she can enjoy Sarah as her name once more. That is an elegant name and she should wear it without stumbling too much. A little trip hear and there is acceptable.

Enjoy your waffles good citizen. We once again bid thee adieu.

Bon Appetite,

The Knights of Commenting