The Way You Left - Comments

i really enjoy drabbles & i really happen to enjoy your drabble. i absolutely adore the manner of human emotion that comes out to play in this. i can relate to the narrator, wishing to have said "i love you back." i see in a comment below that we're all welcome to our interpretations, & while i too feel like sitting by someone's grave, it could be the grave of who you thought this person was.

i adore how this is vague enough to really touch base on a lot of people. it's rhythmic and poetic, serious & gut-wrenching. it's more than enough to pack a punch with a strong beginning, rising climax, and subtle fall.

This has a beautiful, rhythmic tone to it! I love your choice of words. It has a sentimental voice and it carries itself very strongly. I'll definitely read more of your work.

Oh snap! That makes more sense!!

@ discoveringclouds
It supposed to be a death that reads like a breakup, if that makes sense. You're welcome to your own interpretation though!

The story sounds like it wasn't a break up... But someone dying from cancer and there was no choice about it because life and death cannot be changed.

So sad, but also vague enough we can guess. I thought it was a break up or a death. Is it supposed to be one or the other?

Hi! I'm here to judge for the Milk and Honey contest

I really like this piece. I like that you've told the story in second person, I felt this emphasized the pain from the narrator and gave the story more of a personal touch. I've never read a story that approached a breakup in the eyes of the person who initiated the breakup (the way I interpreted it, anyways) so it was interesting to read the other perspective, if that makes sense. I especially liked that you punctuated certain lines such as the I love you making a difference and the final sentence, the way the story was written as a whole really tied the piece together. If I had one criticism, I would say that I didn't think the other person needed to die - I felt like the story had already made a heavy impact with the details of emotions you gave and the heaviness of the story, but it still makes the story powerful regardless. When I read the last line I felt my heart sink and damn, I love when you read something that can make such an impact on a reader.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this piece and thought it tied in wonderfully with the poem chosen. Thank you for entering!

Beautiful <3