Too Much Is Never Enough - Comments

I need more

@ sn4pbackwhore
You're absolutely welcome! Seeing other people in the fandom writing really motivates me. I'm going to try finish my Gabe/Alex fic now...

@ runs_on_coffee
Thank you very much <3

@ WalkingonFirex
Thank you, I'm actually working on a (hopefully) chaptered fic right now. The comment is very much appreciated

Welcome back to the fanfic universe, I feel people will be pleased for your return! And as for this one shot, l I can say is hot damn.

@ joelkanitz
This! THIS is the kinda comments I love, thanks for the feedback; I'm definitely gonna keep that in mind from now on. I really appreciate that

I'm excited to see you writing again because this was great and so hot. I love submissive Alex. It was very well-written, too. Welcome back!

I'd say this is pretty well done for your first smut in a few years! Thank-you for submitting it to ATFF, we appreciate continued traffic to the blog.

The only suggestion I have is less use of the word "you" in the narrative! So this sentence, for example: "Jack spoke a soft thank you before bolting from the building and jumping into his car, and okay, maybe he sped home a little but wouldn't you have done the same thing when your extremely hot, extremely horny and extremely submissive boyfriend was at home waiting for you to fuck him into oblivion?"

I was always taught using "you" in fictional narrative like this is unprofessional and brings the reading age down. I catch myself doing it sometimes still but I just reword the sentence and say something like,"but surely anyone would have done the same thing if their boyfriend was at home..." blah blah.

But it was honestly very good, I hope you have fun getting back into writing!