October 25th, 2018 at 02:45am
Summary: instead it had come on gradually, so insidiously. It had just sort of happened in such a way that things were out of control before many people really knew what hit them - this line stuck out to me the most, and I really want to know more about Kurt. So I’ll read on!
Chapter 1: You have written this to the point it’s believable, and I think that’s a skill to have. I was reading the paragraph about New York and all that was going through my mind was Oh, shit!, haha! I really enjoyed reading the chapter as a whole, and I laughed at the hoarding became a good idea all of a sudden line. Well written, good job done all round!
I only read one chapter but this story has me interested, it was well written and your descriptions are great. You ended chapter one in an unusual place, so I encourage anyone reading to read on!
The summary was just the right length with just enough to draw the reader in without being an info dump, so that was nice. I didn't really notice any grammatical errors either. I've only read the first chapter but it was very well-written and your descriptions were excellent. Love it!