The Beginning of the End - Comments

  • pat sematary;

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    Hi there! I'm just dropping in to give you part of your Mibbaween treat Cute

    The summary was just the right length with just enough to draw the reader in without being an info dump, so that was nice. I didn't really notice any grammatical errors either. I've only read the first chapter but it was very well-written and your descriptions were excellent. Love it!
    October 25th, 2018 at 02:45am
  • mikrokosmos.

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    Summary: instead it had come on gradually, so insidiously. It had just sort of happened in such a way that things were out of control before many people really knew what hit them - this line stuck out to me the most, and I really want to know more about Kurt. So I’ll read on!

    Chapter 1: You have written this to the point it’s believable, and I think that’s a skill to have. I was reading the paragraph about New York and all that was going through my mind was Oh, shit!, haha! I really enjoyed reading the chapter as a whole, and I laughed at the hoarding became a good idea all of a sudden line. Well written, good job done all round!

    I only read one chapter but this story has me interested, it was well written and your descriptions are great. You ended chapter one in an unusual place, so I encourage anyone reading to read on!
    October 11th, 2016 at 11:39am