I Hate You, Jason Lawrence - Comments

@ RosesForNicole
I really appreciate that, and I will continue it eventually, I've just lost my love for my characters. But thank you for the kind words and the feedback! When I get back to it, I'll keep your advice in mind. (:

Too bad. I really did like the idea you had, and wanted to see how it played out. Whatever you do :) make sure to keep doing those descriptive details. You're really good with them.

@ RosesForNicole
I probably won't be doing much with this for a little while, but I appreciate the criticism. (:

You have a few typos. I like your attention to little details, but sometimes that isn't really consistent as you go back and forth between showing and telling the reader what you want them to get from this story. I recommend changing your title too; maybe something like There is a Thin Line, Jason Lawrence.

I like the premise, I look forward to seeing more.