April 9th, 2018 at 12:19am
Good update. :) Hm... not much to say, but just one thing critique wise: make sure when anything is quoted, end punctuation goes inside quotations:
"Maybe this isn't the best for me".
Like what you did here, make sure it's ."
But other than that, great job. :) I assume the story is mainly going to be told in recaps? Which makes it interesting.
Great job with the two new ones! Hmm... so, wait, the band doesn't like her for what she did? Or maybe she's analyzing their reactions incorrectly? :/ I know this is AU, but... did they know about what Alex did to her? And if so... they were all okay with it? What?
Maybe they didn't know about what went on behind closed doors, but it'd be a bit odd since she was forced to tour with them, that like, they didn't see something off. But again, maybe they're just as bad as he is in this story, idk, or just went along with it because they needed a singer. :/
Hmm... also something else I'm wondering: the character is over 18, correct? Because while her parents don't want her to drop the charges, if she's over 18... does she technically have to listen to them? Although it is good that he finally got caught, don't get me wrong, just thinking on the technical side of things. But maybe they can overrule her decisions, maybe she's seen as inept of making her own, like, declared clinically unstable or something. She seems more sure on her relationship with him, so it surprises me that she didn't just go ahead and go against her parents' wishes. But hey... maybe that's planned for the future updates.
lol, I feel like I'm getting over-analytical here, sorry. XD Just expressing some thoughts. But hey, I'm glad you're back, and hope to see more soon! :) I got the notification and it took me a minute to remember exactly what story this was, but now I'm caught up. I read so much so it's hard to keep track sometimes, lol.
Interested in seeing what you have in store for this. :)