Leave This Blue Neighborhood - Comments

@ Mallory
I think you should, this was really good!

@ joelkanitz thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much for the feedback! I'll try to keep that stuff in mind if I if ever try to write anymore fics.

I've just read part one and I really like it! About to read part two.

OKAY PART TWO IS HEARTBREAKING. I really feel for both of them. ):

The last part definitely stings. Poor John. I'm a sucker for a happy ending so I'm totally bummed even though I knew it was coming omg. And Taxi is probably my fave on the new album too!

My only criticisms are there's some spelling/grammar mistakes, so getting someone else to give it a proof-read can really help with that! Sometimes it's hard to see your own mistakes even if you proof-read it a couple times yourself. A fresh set of eyes is always good. Also, the part where John's dad walks in on them feels somewhat too abrupt. That might sound silly because obviously it's supposed to be a surprise but there didn't feel like there was any link between them kissing and his father entering the room. This link might help! (Even though you didn't actually write "suddenly" or "all of a sudden" but I've found it helpful for the same reasons in the past). - http://writers.stackexchange.com/questions/3670/all-of-a-sudden

But all in all, this is good for a first fic! I hope you had fun writing it! New Callakarth content always makes me happy.

I also wanted to say thank-you for using alltimefanfiction to promote it and you're more than welcome to submit us any future fics you write/future chapters you publish for other fics.

So glad I finally got around to finishing this! Love your writing, and yes, taxi has been on repeat ever since it was released hahaha

@ ellzbellz2000 Thank you! You're too kind!

love this so far! can't wait to read more :)