May 8th, 2017 at 08:51pm
Here as a judge for the Magazine contest!
Like the others, I absolutely wasn't expecting this story at all! As I was reading the beginning I truly expected this to be an engagement story or something similar and then when I hit the last couple of paragraphs, I started to get a little suspicious. Leaving the entire narration of the narrator... well, eating Yoongi until the last paragraph was definitely interesting. As losing control. said, the narrator does sound rather ominous throughout, but it's not something you pick up on as a reader until the very last minute -- then you feel really silly for being dragged into these romantic preconceptions you have once you read!
Your writing itself is very poetic, too. I love the introductory line and the way that you describe things. Everything is just very well put-together, and it definitely adds to the romantic feel that the first half of the story has. It also gives more impact to the final few paragraphs and I think you end this on a really nice line -- I'ma fan of the last line for sure.
All in all, this was a really good entry! I loved the unexpectedness of it and the fact that you chose to go down an entirely different route to what I would have expected. Nice work!
@ exploding boy.
Thank you :)