Limerence - Comments

@ aliens.
Yes, In the new movie he is a fairly new hero. He’s known around Queens, but since she’s just moved there, she really has no idea who he is.

Thank you so much for reading! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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I haven't seen the new Spider-Man movie yet, so I can't comment much on that. I did enjoy the way this started out with Callie and her conversation with Lea, plus giving insight on the fact that there's a lot of destruction in New York from everything that goes on with the superheroes. I've never seen the destruction caused touched on in a fic.

I did see quite a few errors, so I recommend going back and reading through the first chapter again (or finding a beta - I'd be happy to look it over for you again). As I said, I did enjoy the way this started and the conversations Callie and Lea had, but I would've also liked to have seen a little more on Spider-Man especially. I'm assuming he's a new hero, which is why Callie didn't recognize him/hadn't heard of him. It left me kind of confused and pulled me out of the story a bit.

Other than that, I enjoyed this. Well done!

@ General_Oeder
Thanks for your input! I hadn’t even thought of using a Stan Lee cameo, but I might actually do that! I’m not so sure about Deadpool though. I think that would take away from the Homecoming movie it’s based on.

I like the story so far. The premise is really good, and the characters are fun and it feels real. I hope you add a Stan Lee appearance somewhere in here, because as we all know Stan Lee is everywhere in the Marvel Multiverse. It would also be cool if you were to add a Deadpool scene where he asks the readers to comment on the story or something like that.