Story - Comments

@ tunit907
I just found a way to save drafts in Mibba. It's staring you in the face the whole time!
So I saved the first draft and then changed what I had.

I did my rewrite in draftin.com, which I probably will continue cause I like the interface. It's very minimalistic.

I just went through and corrected a lot of first half of the first chapter up to the point where the second character's part starts. I'll do work on cleaning up La' Dana's parts more soon.

@ silverspeed
I find it can be a bit hard to edit. I've lost some work once or twice because of it.

Ive started to write in word then copy and paste. Then I always have a backup.

@ tunit907
Thank you for your comment.
I will go through the first chapter, and the rest of the story, soon and look over my formatting and more closely look at the dialog.

Before posting it I was only concerned with correcting all the spelling and punctuation errors I'd had.

The relationship is, Ari has no relationship to La' Dana at the beginning. So if it feels like that, that is why.

I think it's all about my formatting I could improve the pov and the where people are talking more just by rewriting parts. So before I consider giving them different chapters I'll go through and make sure the dialog more readable.

Is there a way to have different edits on Mibba so if I change something and should change it back it's really easy?

I've only read the first chapter and I must say the formatting was difficult to read. Without spacing between the dialogue I found it hard to know when one person stopped talking and the other started especially with lots of sentences starting with I.

I'm a bit confused on why they are their relationship. Some more setting the scene and a little less of the I did this and I saw that.

Last bit, I would consider giving each characters pov its own chapter: Ie Chapter 1 Ari Chapter 2 La Dana. Then you dont have to say This section is blah.