Ashes to Ashes - Comments

New chapter! Awesome!
I'm curious as to what they're going to do now that they're homeless? I loved the part where she's about to shop lift, and changes her mind because the cashier had offered to pay for her groceries. It's another look into Carter's head, and gives you a better understanding of who she is as a person, and where the line between good and bad lies with her. Agh can't wait to read more! I saw the notification that you'd updated while I was in town and read it first thing when I got back. Awesome work!

" Carter Bishop was sixteen the day she died with the doe in the woods."
This is such a poignant line. I feel so sorry for her having to go through with that when she really didn't want to. From what you've written, her parents were very overbearing and don't seem to listen to poor Carter at all. It's not surprising she was so taken with Seth. He comes across very laid back and care free, someone like that would have been a breath of fresh air for her.

It's touching that he wants to look after her, but he shouldn't have given her the drugs in the first place, haha.

Your descriptions are wonderful, no flowery language in sight, very easy to imagine the scene unfolding.

Excited to read more!

I love this story already!
It flows really well, weaving between her troubled home life, her bad hunting experiences with her dad, and her dreadful reality nicely. The way you describe the scenes is amazing, makes you feel like you're there, like how she describes Seth when he first walks into the apartment, and pointing out the little details in his appearance that exhibit their current living conditions without having to point it out too much.

The story itself captivated me straight away, and now I've subbed and am ready (and quite anxious) to read more!

And real quick, I lovvee your layout. I'm a sap for black and white aesthetic photos lol

I already feel like this is going to be one of those that leaves me in tears or excited for more.

The beginning of the first chapter had me guessing that Carter was already going down a path she couldn't find her way back out of, but I didn't expect it to be like that. It makes me curious for more of her background and with how chapter two ended, I'm not surprised that she ended up in a hospital bed.

I'm excited to read more.

Two chapters in and I'm hooked!

I have a feeling that Carter's story is going to get a lot worse before it gets better. Each shot of heroin she takes will never measure up to that first high, she's going down a slippery slope :/ I'm excited to follow the journey!

Oh man, I feel bad for Carter. In chapter 1 already, I can tell she's in for some trouble. I really like the way you write, everything flows nicely, ot unfolds effortlessly. The plot is quite interesting, too. Not necessarily unique, but you give it in your style with how you pace it. Carter is also quite a relatable chatacter, she feels very real. She was just a dreamer who got caught up in bad influnces. I hope she finds her way and dumps Seth

Oh man, I feel bad for Carter. In chapter 1 already, I can tell she's in for some trouble. I really like the way you write, everything flows nicely, ot unfolds effortlessly. The plot is quite interesting, too. Not necessarily unique, but you give it in your style with how you pace it. Carter is also quite a relatable chatacter, she feels very real. She was just a dreamer who got caught up in bad influnces. I hope she finds her way and dumps Seth

Amazing! I can't wait to see more!

Definitely wasn't expecting that at the beginning of the chapter - although the beginning does have a nice poetry to it in regards to how the chapter ends.

It was really interesting and realistic to read the interaction between Carter and her mother. And the question you leave hanging in the air about what had happened to her to leave her in the hospital with her dad's reaction almost gives an idea of an answer.

Overall this seems very realistic and I think you're going to do a great job with it.

I really like this, and I can't wait to see more.