Imminent - Comments

I already absolutely adore this story, can't wait for more chapters!

Once again, mega-late but better late than never, right?

introduction
I think what I like about the introduction the most is that it's so fast. I feel like there's a very fine line between keeping things vague and just confusing the reader, and you really managed to work it perfectly here. There's not a lot of information and I go away left with a load of questions that make me want to read on. The fast-paced feel to it also adds to that, where you get the idea as a reader that everything's spiralled completely out of control even before you've got that line in there. You get this real feel for the snowball effect that led to that moment. Definitely a nice hook!

01
6AM football practice? I'd literally have killed my football coach if he'd have tried that when I was still playing. But then again my football coach also wasn't Jensen Ackles so y'know, swings and roundabouts. I like the little introduction we get to Lauren here -- she seems super-sassy and I love that in a female character. Also, major props for having a girl's football team in this because I never see it around enough and it makes me so sad because I am really into football in a big way. I'm excited to see that aspect of it, but also excited to start putting the pieces together from the introduction and this, because I'm getting the serious student-teacher-got-found-out vibe and I'm living for all of this drama.

I'm so excited to see more of this, keep it up!

Introduction

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Imminent, I think, was a better way to describe what we were.

I love stories that incorporate the title, so this was nice to see!

I really loved this introduction! It sucked me in and makes me want to read on and see how things to get to this point and what's going to happen.

Chapter One

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"Sounds like a dick," I muttered, Lindsay shooting me a look as Richards laughed, pointing a finger at me.

"Missed that humor of yours, Miss Davis."

I really liked this little interaction.

I loved this first chapter! Peyton seems awesome and sassy and I love that about her already. Jensen also seems sassy, so I can't wait to see how everything works out with these two and how their relationship grows! I've definitely subscribed to this and am excited to read more!