Out of Reach - Comments

Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, oH WOW.

This was so beautiful. Like??? I cannot even put it into words how beautiful it was reading this, you have no idea. The little details, the raw emotion, the flow, just everything was so great. I found myself rereading it again because I loved it so much.

I love despite there not being too much backstory on the characters, they have this sense of familiarity. I love that they don't really have any sort of history or connection before this. All they do is just ride the bus, and they happen to ride it everything and ride it in the back. But the one connection they seem to have is that one book. I just love that, it's so simple but so meaningful at the same time.

The setting also is what I love. It's a unique setting that you would sort of least expect romance, but I think it fits the characters well. You really drew me in with the first paragraph, as it reminded me of my school days since I used to ride the bus to school. I instantly connected with Sylwia, as I used to read on the bus and would forget that I was even on. I even almost missed my stop once. XD

The last paragraph was my favorite. You wrote it so well, it was so beautiful. This whole piece was beautiful. Oh my gosh.

I'm gonna go reread this again, excuse me~

@ Ghoul Scouts
um sorry?

Hina, your writing always blows me away. The time you took for detail in this is incredible. The emotion was so raw in this too. GREAT JOB!

@ Brittt
Whoa, your comment was completely uncalled for. Joking aside, I know you would not appreciate getting a comment like that. Please be more respectful when you are pointing out mistakes.

SIGN ME UP.

@ petite mafia.
Aha thank you! <3 I'm planning on writing some more stories on the two characters in this story eventually.

This is such a beautiful piece, Hina. The movement and flow are so natural and raw. I love it so much.

@ Brittt
ah ok xD Well i fixed them! I was actually typing faster than I could think as i was looking at the story in the notebook but thank you! XD

@ Webby Vanderquack
Just some of the typos dear, haha.

@ Brittt
half drunk? What? Lol. But thank you. I'll write a related story that fleshes out the characters and the world around them so thank you! ^^

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