Hayne 25 - Comments

  • nearly witches.

    nearly witches. (15250)

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    I'm here judging entries for my Mistletoe and Wine contest! Cute

    Layout / Summary

    Okay so the layout is stunning, whaaaaaaat? I hate how you do that omg. And I adore the first two sentences of the summary, they paint such a beautiful picture. I can't wait to read more!

    Content

    I think I've probably said this before, but your description is just breathtaking. I can almost imagine myself in Hayne, drinking the lattes and letting the snowflakes melt into my skin. And the comets on Christmas Eve? Amazing. I want to see something like that in my lifetime, I can imagine it really is truly breathtaking.

    I think my favourite part about this is the repetition, though. It always brings the reader back to this one point, this point that Hayne is stunning, and really encapsulates what Christmas is. It's so different, not having a de-facto character and having them do something. It's just this beautiful description of a place captured almost in a photograph and then described, and it's so soothing to read. And the repetition just ties everything together in a perfect bow.

    Concrit

    Nope, I got nothing. Zip, nada.

    Overall

    I adore this piece. It's written beautifully and it's just so perfect and wonderful and makes me feel so warm and fuzzy. I love it.
    March 21st, 2019 at 10:23pm
  • alexander bernadotte

    alexander bernadotte (125)

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    hayne reminds me a bit of the sky screen on vegas's fremont's street. this idea is so cool and i can't wait to see you run with it!
    December 24th, 2018 at 05:14am