hello! i'm so sorry for the super late comment but oof, i'm completely ready for this!
from the very first sentence, i was here for this fic. you automatically drew me in completely. i felt like i was there, listening to the phones ringing, people talking, and keys clacking. the only critique i have is that talking or chattering could be omitted. having both there is kinda redundant.
my god, i can feel the tension leading up to the stock market crashing. like, i literally held my breath??? and then the silence and everything turning to chaos. wow. i completely felt that? like, you're making me care about the stock market in this fic.
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It’ll be right, it’s just a small slip… not to worry, m’am, give it a couple of years… your investment is in good hands, you can trust me.
right should be alright
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He lost several million dollars in the last five minute and
add an s to the minute!
i mean, drugs are bad. but shit, i'd probably want to do that too if the stock market crashed and i was being verbally abused.
okay, boy, a hundred dollar bill? you extra, my dude.
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He leans back: euphoria. Ecstasy washing over him, and he sighs, contented
ngl, i'm living for this line
HOLY SHIT????? I WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT LAST PARAGRAPH HOLY???? damn, good on you for that! not even kidding, the last thing i was expecting was an overdose but wow. wow. i thought he was just gonna get high and that was that, but you really packed a punch and whew. i'm here for it.
this was so damn good! your writing is amazing and i was so immersed in your words. you really painted a picture of what was going on and i was able to imagine everything happening. also, dude fuckin dying. yeah, idk if it's because i'm tired or what but i really didn't see that coming???
from the very first sentence, i was here for this fic. you automatically drew me in completely. i felt like i was there, listening to the phones ringing, people talking, and keys clacking. the only critique i have is that talking or chattering could be omitted. having both there is kinda redundant.
my god, i can feel the tension leading up to the stock market crashing. like, i literally held my breath??? and then the silence and everything turning to chaos. wow. i completely felt that? like, you're making me care about the stock market in this fic.right should be alrightadd an s to the minute!
i mean, drugs are bad. but shit, i'd probably want to do that too if the stock market crashed and i was being verbally abused.
okay, boy, a hundred dollar bill? you extra, my dude.ngl, i'm living for this line
HOLY SHIT????? I WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT LAST PARAGRAPH HOLY???? damn, good on you for that! not even kidding, the last thing i was expecting was an overdose but wow. wow. i thought he was just gonna get high and that was that, but you really packed a punch and whew. i'm here for it.
this was so damn good! your writing is amazing and i was so immersed in your words. you really painted a picture of what was going on and i was able to imagine everything happening. also, dude fuckin dying. yeah, idk if it's because i'm tired or what but i really didn't see that coming???
awesome piece!