In Life And Death - Comments

I especially liked the second chapter, there was something distant about it, I dont know quite what it is that had me liking these stories but whatever..
you have a haunting set of one shots, I hope you write more, I'd be interested to read more =]

That was haunting. I couldn't stop reading. I guessed what would happen once she got there and Andy was drunk off his face.
But I really thought he would be okay - you know since he was all sweet and shy in the beginning.

Wow - your writing has improved so much. Its amazing. Still, the only thing I could see that you might want to fix are tenses of words, spelling, and occasionally "he" and "she" got a little mixed up.

Fantastic Job, Ross.
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Wow....you had to make the anti-social person be scared ;_; xD
All in all it was awesome despite the obnoxious bad butt headed
friends she had. Poor thing.
Keep it up! I shall be looking for the next installment!

Oh my goodness. My heart started pounding when I had finished reading the first one.

And the second one, wow, that was all to descriptive. It was absolutely bloody amazing

That was really sad. Really, really sad and beautiful at the same time.

You're right, your form is a lot better in this one than in the last one. The only thing I can comment on in this one is your punctuation and spelling. Spell check saves lives, dude. No lie.

I liked the POV. It was kind of third person, but not quite. Almost like a play. That was really haunting. It adds something to the story I think.

Good Job, Ross.
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That was really good. There's a lot of genuine emotion in it, and the plot is interesting enough to captivate the reader and keep them reading until the end. I like your ideas about death - they're really...unexpected and sad.

The only things I'd point out for work or editing is spellcheck and your form. You wrote this one-shot as a poem first right? It shows. xD

I liked it though. It was good.
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thats amazing
i cant even explain it rossen
that made me so sad... its so descripitive... and... just.. amazing
Wow