December 5th, 2017 at 09:13pm
Gah, can you say addictionn?!
You're a really talented writer!
A bit of constructive criticism though? You change your POV a lot, like I'm not talking about from Alex to Kaitlyn, like in one sentence you were talking about Kaitlyn & said something like this: "I sat on the steps and curled my legs to her chest." It's no biggie, I'm just a freakk ahah[:
This story has me sooo freakingg hooked!
I really like this one as well. It's a bit frustrating, though. I feel like Kait has had the answer right in front of her this whole time, but she still fails to realize it. Sigh. I mean, I can understand that debate at first, but when it goes on practically the whole story, it's just frustrating! lol. But it's still a good story, though. I enjoy seeing the growth with Alex's character in this one; usually writers don't really show that in as much detail. I mean, he's still being immature with a few different things, but like, he was able to drop it when it went too far (the fighting with Jack, the custody papers...).
So yeah, I'm also bummed this story wasn't finished. I realize it has also been a while since this one too, so it may be a bit pointless asking for it to be updated again. But I just wanted to let you know I'm reading this one as well and am interested in reading more if you ever choose to continue. I think it deserves an ending, especially after all of the back and forth. Like, who does she end up picking? :O
Great job with what you have of it, though.