Adopt a Soldier, Vengeance! - Comments

sammisabotage_103 (100)

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I know u haven't updated this story in forever but please update soon I love this story

September 13th, 2010 at 02:01am

starbella (100)

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Please update this story!

January 19th, 2010 at 10:33pm

starbella (100)

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PLEASE UPDATE

December 28th, 2009 at 08:06am

starbella (100)

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when are you going to update? its been awhile!

December 25th, 2009 at 06:41am

Farce. (100)

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Wonderful story! I love it!

December 17th, 2009 at 09:47pm

VengeanceXChickX (100)

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I can't wait for the next update!!!!

September 25th, 2009 at 11:55pm

efflorescxnt (100)

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i love this story! its different from any other ive read! more!

September 24th, 2009 at 05:13am

bloodravyn (100)

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loved!

September 23rd, 2009 at 08:16pm

VengeanceIsMine (100)

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aw =]

June 10th, 2009 at 04:47pm

VengeanceXChickX (100)

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Awwww they're adorable.

June 10th, 2009 at 12:40am

ShaleseRayEen (100)

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I fricken LOVE this story!!!!!
can't wait for the next update!!!:)

March 5th, 2009 at 11:32pm

VengeanceXChickX (100)

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Awww she finally found out he's ZV

November 25th, 2008 at 07:30pm

VengeanceIsMine (100)

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XD thanks fro updating this!!i love this story!
its very original and good!!!
cant wait 4 more!!

November 20th, 2008 at 10:06pm

dreamsXatXmidnight (100)

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thank you! thank you! thank you! i love it!!!!

November 20th, 2008 at 08:39pm

bloodravyn (100)

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yya for the update!

November 20th, 2008 at 08:34am

PowerLizzie Saosin (100)

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So far it's interesting. You're very heavy on the exclamation points, though. (And Sgt. Morrisson's whole first letter to Zacky was full of exclamation points.)

There's not been much character development, and you skipped a whole year so we didn't get to see how they bonded. We know nothing about this Sgt and what would make Zacky like her enough to ask her to move in with him (when he still has never met her before).

Her reaction to finding out who he is may or may not be a little unrealistic. I would be a heck of a lot more shocked, or possibly angry with him that he kept his identity from me for a year. And how exactly did she bond so much with him, if he has never sent her a picture of himself or told her what his job is?

It's a great idea, I just think you need more detail, more character development, and to lay off the exclamation points.

November 20th, 2008 at 04:02am