Please Be All Mine - Comments

monstercables13 (100)

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Indeed there is more to come! ^^,

August 31st, 2009 at 10:05pm

Post-It (100)

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Ahhhh so good!!
Will there be more?
xox

August 17th, 2008 at 03:07am

Dani Destruction (100)

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haha
I spy Olivia again..
i liked it..
"NO MUFASSA WATCH OUT FOR SCAR"
That's like my favorite part
XD

August 15th, 2008 at 09:38pm

Music.DrownLife (100)

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I love Frankie.
I just told you that in person.

July 23rd, 2008 at 12:33pm

Music.DrownLife (100)

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I know what happens next, because you created it at my house.
I'm stoked to read the next part.
Oh yes indeed I am.

July 23rd, 2008 at 11:10am

Apolaustic (100)

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ooooo they're gonna do it
maybe if Zacky doesn't bail again
more more more?

July 23rd, 2008 at 09:49am

Apolaustic (100)

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this is really good
sex between guys is kinda hard
I remember struggling when I first started like the person above said find someone really good and read theirs's it'll help you

July 23rd, 2008 at 08:36am

Music.DrownLife (100)

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Suggstion: more narrative and less dialog.
Most readers, I find, enjoy description.
It's hard to do and I'm just now getting a hang of it.
I'm sure you can tell.
If you need help with it, find a really well written story and analyze it.
It helped me.

Loooooove yoooooou Peanut.

July 22nd, 2008 at 12:55am