Aw, Kay, this is cute. You just couldn't resist it, could you? :o I though it was interesting. A few grammatical errors, but nothing..too significant, really. It's different from a lot of the stories that I've read. You used a third person omniscient point of view for the most part, which I found intriguing. A bit confusing, but, nonetheless, original. The name fits perfectly as well. :) I like it. Pshh, and you said I'd never get to it, silly you. :P
I though it was interesting. A few grammatical errors, but nothing..too significant, really. It's different from a lot of the stories that I've read. You used a third person omniscient point of view for the most part, which I found intriguing. A bit confusing, but, nonetheless, original.
The name fits perfectly as well. :) I like it.
Pshh, and you said I'd never get to it, silly you. :P