Little Boy Lost. - Comments

I love how you switched back and forth with each paragraph, giving us only a snapshot of his relationship with that person and nothing more. I'm not sure if this is what you were going for but I felt that you could watch Ryan fall apart more with each man that came by, culminating with the unknown boy. As the drabble progressed, he became more and more lost.

That ending was just amazing. When you repeated his name, I could picture him falling more and more apart until that last line, which was just amazing and so hard hitting. This was very dark but I thought it was amazing.

I liked this.
I think the lack of description was really effective to the piece.
Good stuff.

That was amazing.

Ryan.

Ryan.

Ryan.

Ryan. Bullet.

That was such a brilliant, epic ending.
I loved it.

I'm saving it in my favourites. :cute:

Wow. I liked that. Majorly intense.

really cool. i like it.

This one I'll actually make a story thread for.
I'm particularly proud of this drabble.
Ryan character fiction.
Let me know what you think.

Happy [?] reading!

xoxox
-Dru