The amazing, detailed words you used to create a picture entranced me and got me seriously hooked on the story. I would probably include an example here or something but there are way too many to choose from! As I'm sure you know, being able to have a mental image in your mind of what you're reading is a wonderful thing ;)
I loved how they met, just casually at a bar, but then, at the end of the night, this girl wanted something more, as I'm sure most girls would feel. I loved how it bloomed into something more. But in the end, he promised forever and always, but couldn't give it to her and he left :(
The 2nd chapter, honestly, left me confused :| I'm not really sure what was going on. I'm guessing she found the same guy at the bar? Or was that just a memory? Not really sure....
The amazing, detailed words you used to create a picture entranced me and got me seriously hooked on the story. I would probably include an example here or something but there are way too many to choose from! As I'm sure you know, being able to have a mental image in your mind of what you're reading is a wonderful thing ;)
I loved how they met, just casually at a bar, but then, at the end of the night, this girl wanted something more, as I'm sure most girls would feel. I loved how it bloomed into something more. But in the end, he promised forever and always, but couldn't give it to her and he left :(
The 2nd chapter, honestly, left me confused :| I'm not really sure what was going on. I'm guessing she found the same guy at the bar? Or was that just a memory? Not really sure....
But anyway, great job! :mrgreen: