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  • StiltzScreamsRemedy

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    This is really good, try not using "I" too much though, it gets really annoying after a while. Other than that little bit, it's really good.
    September 21st, 2010 at 05:24pm
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    Awwww I loved the storyy.
    May 17th, 2009 at 10:13pm
  • queenofswords24

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    I love this story, but I think you definitely rushed the ending. There were more spelling and grammar mistakes than usual and it was really brief. Still good writing, though, and I like the ending.
    May 14th, 2009 at 02:06pm
  • queenofswords24

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    Poor City!
    Hope Celia didnt mess up anything by telling her parents about the Cullens.
    May 11th, 2009 at 02:53am
  • ilovedinosRAWR

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    Dude, new fan, love the story..
    but.....
    when it ends.....
    you better do a sequel or i will hunt you down and force you to write one!

    -_-

    have a nice day dear!
    :D
    May 9th, 2009 at 09:08am
  • queenofswords24

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    I feel like your writing style has changed... dont rush it okay?

    I hope Edward can get her back!
    May 6th, 2009 at 05:23pm
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    I can't believe they took her.
    May 6th, 2009 at 01:08am
  • rtrboo

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    why did you stop writing!!!! You need to keep writing please!!!!!!
    April 26th, 2009 at 04:10am
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    Aww dinner seemed fun.
    April 4th, 2009 at 01:29am
  • queenofswords24

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    Whew!!! That went well. I would absolutely kill my siblings if they did that to me though. Rosalie needs to go fall in a hole.
    April 3rd, 2009 at 02:18am
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    I thought it would be James.
    March 21st, 2009 at 10:42pm
  • queenofswords24

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    Awwwies! So so happy you updated. More more more!
    March 16th, 2009 at 12:58am
  • queenofswords24

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    *sigh* can edward be mine now?
    February 14th, 2009 at 03:42am
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    Awww he's just awesome.
    February 13th, 2009 at 06:40pm
  • queenofswords24

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    That would be the first thing my mom would say, too. Hope Edward doesn't offend anyone by not eating!
    January 31st, 2009 at 07:23pm
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    Haha. Awww Edward's gonna have to eat human food.
    January 30th, 2009 at 08:48pm
  • queenofswords24

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    Ah! Scary! But you know the first rule of having a car following you is to NOT go home! You're supposed to go to a police station or a place with a lot of people that you can yell to.
    Anyway, please update again! I was so psyched to see your title in my e-mail!
    January 26th, 2009 at 09:03pm
  • Kayla Cassells

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    UPDATE!!
    PRETTY PRETTY PLZ!!!!
    January 18th, 2009 at 10:06pm
  • VengeanceXChickX

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    Having a vampire as a stalker sounds horrible.
    January 16th, 2009 at 12:27am
  • XxXmyrazorsuicideXxX

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    cool
    January 15th, 2009 at 03:02pm
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