Stockholm: Agent of Chaos - Comments

Yes, it was. It was supposed to be a short story. (:

And thank you for your comments.

...is that the end??

YAY!
I loved the udpate!
I truly did,
i thought it very cute.

I haven't read a story on here by someone I didn't know, because I didn't find anything interesting enough.

But I must say, I am hooked on this now.

And subscribed.

Day 1: You got me hook, line and sinker with this one hun! A fantastic start to a Joker story; you really do have his character nailed. I look forward to reading more.

wow
*New Reader*
*Subscribes*
Amazing much?
Update soon?

i really like this story. i think you should continue it. i will read. your doing very good. good luck!

I seriously dig this story. You're getting him right.
And big kudos for using the word unbeknownst. :tehe:

Thanks for the criticism you give me. I really prefer it sometimes when people give me their opinions on what I can change. :mrgreen:

And yeah. She doesn't have a "name". At least not one that I will give out. x] I love reading stories where you never know the main character's name.

"Day 3"

It had gotten to the point where I wanted him there to keep me company so I wouldn't feel so useless.

I like how she's starting to get use to him and everything, like a change in heart.

All I could think of was when was he coming back.

I felt that maybe, you could have re-worded that to make it more readable. But I love your narration in this chapter, it's more deep and descriptive then the other two. I guess the Joker has the affect on people, he was just about to cut her face and now she can't stand that he's not around anymore and for some reason I like that aspect it makes them both fragile in a way.

I liked how he got her a burger with onions that made me laugh, throughout the humor of it all is beautiful and I love it.

Awe, the Joke killed for her. Also, I like that you never tell us the woman's name or maybe I just missed it. The ending was different and yet again I didn't see that coming.

This is great!
more soon?

Very nicely written. Kudos.

Wonderful.

I really, really want to see where this goes.
More, please?

oh my god. this is fucking AMAZING. i really can't wait to see what happens next.

*subscribes*

"Stockholm"

Day one

The beginning was an attention grabber and my eyes were complete glued to the screen the whole way I even ignored my mother when she was talking to me, but the intensely of the setting was very scary. Question after question ran through my mind as to how and why did she get herself in this predicament and since she's dealing with the Joker then there's no telling.

"I heard a blood curling laugh."

I'm pretty sure that's a horrible sound ringing in your ears. The way you described the Joker was right on all the way down to his action, voice and looks. I felt I was there scared as shit staring at him. It made my skin crawl picturing his voice and seeing him speak the way he did and now in this story.

"Wanna know how I got these scars?" he asked."

I mean there nothing very negative to say about that last piece of your story it match the tone lovely and it had this morbid feeling to it and I thought that was amazing.

My favorite lines form this chapter would be:

"Can you believe that?! Oh my. What a riot she was!" He licked his dry and cracked lips and proceeded. "Then! Then after she sees that I'm clearly upset, she goes on to say, 'Why so serious? Let's go back to the party.' Why so serious, I ask myself over and over. Why so serious? Why so fucking serious?

And the ending I didn't see that coming at all. He just leaves her there with a kiss.

Day two

"She was a beauty if I never seen one before. Short, blonde hair. Round, icy blue eyes. A waist as thin as a carrot with ass and tits like melons." He moved his hair out of his face."

I love the way the Joker talks like he takes quick breaks between his words and you characterize that quite well. That just means you understand the Joker as a human and I loved that the most.

"He flew into a coughing fit for a few minutes.

"Excuse me," he said after he finished."

That made me smile he seemed serious all the time in my opinion even with his sarcastic comments all the time. His questions were another thing that got to me, that fact that he always asked them and he cared about "love" a lot I noticed.

Throughout the story your dialogue marks really bothered me sometimes you would use " and then ' and when the Joker or the husband (in the second chapter) talked in got confused when there were breaking up.

"Why haven't you killed me?!" I screamed."

What a way to leave us thinking, but I think he loves her and because of his horrid past he can't tell her. He's not a softy he fuckin kills people, but the ending was beyond amazing. This is the second Joker fic I read and actually liked.

I really like it so far.

I like it!

words fail me now, seriously.
story is brilliant, wow.
damn.. you're good.

Read and comment please. (: