Denial - Comments

oh god, this was amazing.
i guess all of us who wanted more than a two-shot will have to use our imaginations... haha.

anyways, this was very well written. good job!

Ohhhh I read this ages ago but never commented.

It was awesome and all whoa like...In a good way.

He doesn't like Gerard...just no.

"Denial"

Not that he had much of a problem getting that. He had the looks, the money, and the cock. Gerard didn’t agree with this, of course. But he had to go with it. It was part of the plan.

The beginning was great and I loved that sentence about Frank and the way you described him was cute and it made me smile.

It was just the two of them, alone, bundled up in each other’s arms. Nobody was watching.

There whole relationship was cute and kind of weird :tehe: I wish you would have went into the background of there relationship a lot more so your readers could get a sense of how there loved developed and nothing was wrong with how you've written I just thought maybe that could help a little. Am reading and witting this review at the same time so, please bare with me and I will read the second chapter as well.

The ending of chapter one was sad and I had a hard time finding the emotion because, really there was none and I think this is the first story I've read by you and I noticed you said that this wasn't very good, but there's some mistakes here and there I overall wouldn't call this "bad" you know?

“Frank, you’re gay and you know it.”

:tehe: that caught me off guard a little. The second chapter was a lot better I think with Frank and Gerard's diction and emotion. I felt the anger between them this time.

Frank was the kind of person that was afraid of change.

The one line told me all I had to know about Frank as a person. He doesn't care about a lot of things in his life and Gee being one of them, which makes me sad to see when someone really cares for him. That just makes Gee more frail.

I liked the plane they had between each other about finding out if Frank was gay or not. How cute. Overall I thought the narration was decent and I know you've improved from this one story already so, I shall read something more of update from you soon then.

Good gosh, you write.
And I just want to keep reading.
You're phenomenal. >_>

(Little green monster, much?)

But nonetheless.
Bah, the ending made me wanna throw things. :S
In a good way though, I guess.
You must be amazing if you can illicit such emotion from people, you know? ;D

Wow, that was really good.
Like, amazingly good.
You have a really beautiful writing style; it flows, and somehow that whole thing fit together at the end.

I agree with Ivanka.
Interesting, and of course it left me dying to know who he had eyes for.
I like the ending, especially how Gerard was so happy about it and Frank was so reluctant to admit he's gay.
It was really good :)

EDIT: I did notice an error but I saw where you had said it wasn't edited :)

Unapologetic Apathy:

what?

It can't end there!

Who does Frankie have eyes for if not Gee??!!???

please, please continue

Update Spoon!!

IT'S A TWO-SHOT

-Sigh- Sorry. It annoys me when people want updates when there can't be more.
It's a really amazing story, very well written and interesting. The end made me sad, though, but it's good to have other endings than the normal "happy" ones, ya'know? ^__^

what?

It can't end there!

Who does Frankie have eyes for if not Gee??!!???

please, please continue

Update Spoon!!

This is really good.
Update soon?

A Frerard two-shot.

Frank doesn't want to be gay.
And he got Gerard to help him stay straight.
But he's got other plans.

I love hearing from my readers.