Impossible? - Comments

ooooooh creepy!! very well written, you are too clever hahaha

i have to say, i was very confused at the end but it was soo good. kept me wanting to read more, and I have to agree with JoanGreenwood, I would have loved it if you'd had the inspiration to write more of it.
Very interesting twist at the end.

I must say, any story that involves something a little trippy, I'm there. I wish I had found this sooner!

I just love this to pieces. I've read and re-read it. The little clues in her psychosis were excellent and pulled it off well. The dream cliché actually didn't hit me until I read the above comment so, that's pretty damn good, huh? Either that or I'm being silly.

I adore your word choice and I didn't pick up anything I would have personally changed.

Wait, I wouldn't have used the name Andrea, but that's for personal reasons. So, overall...perfect little story and I wish you had the inspiration to make this into a long story as it has HEAPS of potential.

Wow thanks. Really. You give great reviews. And yeah, I should change the epitaph.

... I CAN'T believe I missed the overall loop element!

VERY nice.

Oh, just really quickly. Get rid of the "***" and change the epitaph to "You will always be remembered, Essie" rather than "Andrea."

Cool. Very cool, in fact. You managed to take the "it was all a dream" cliche and transform it into something fresh. There were a few grammatical mistakes (very few) and word choices I thought were awkward, but overall the style was not held back by anything I'd remotely call lack of control over the language.

I'll admit, I felt a little confused because of the whole "Andrea's gone" and then "I killed my daughter Essie!" I thought she had two daughters until you showed us the headstone. However, I loved that confusion when I'd finished reading, because the mixing up of two different people, the blurred lines between the fictional and actual, ultimately expanded on the overall schizophrenic theme, and, purposefully or not, worked absolutely brilliantly. I'll correct the grammatical mistakes and word choice "errors" I saw at a later date. I'm not sure if a print-out and read-through will help you catch some of the grammatical mistakes, because a few of them were a little obscure/things you wouldn't catch in a proofread. For instance, the Doctor was "woken" by blah blah should be "the Doctor was awoken by blah blah." You wake, but are awoken by someone. To awake requires a direct object, to wake does not use a direct object.

thats very gd, i really like it!!! nothing wrong with keeping it short

Oooh, I like this. It was rather confusing, and I'm still not exactly sure what my take on the plot is, but I enjoyed reading it. You managed to keep me entertained, and with my stupidly low attention span - that's quite something.

Ohhh! Very Good! A Tad Confusing , But In A Good Way! Keep Up The Good Work! I Hope You Write More! Maybe You Could Do More On These Dreams Or Whatever They Are! (I Dunno If You Allready Have) **Miniforce**

This is great!! Really original.