Show Me What I'm Looking For - Comments

I've only read the first chapter but from what I've seen, I really like this.
You write well.
I'll try to comment you with something a bit more substantial when I've finished haha
But for now, this lame comment is all i've got.
: )

haha a bit of a dramatic way to leave
I like it
I'm still kind of debating whether or not John deserved that...not the thing with Kennedy, he didn't deserve that...but everything else
sleeping with Kennedy was a little uncalled for, especially knowing how he feels
but I think it adds to it

haha I don't know
all in all it was pretty great though haha

damnn, that was intense.
I feel horrible for Kennedy...
and everyone else in this. D:

but I am excited for the sequel!

POOR ALI!
AND POOR KENNY! :arms:
AND POOR JOHN!

I'm still team CHEEK POCKETS, jsyk :file:
John can suck it :hand:

YAYYYYY SEQUEL! :crazy:

this is like a movie,
but it's miraculous.
I am so excited for the next one.

whoa, that was epic haha
I really hope it works out...but if she still has to leave then what's gonna happen?
oh well, that's not as important at the moment
I really do hope it works out for them though. That would be cool

YAYAYAYAYAYAYAY! THEY BETTER FIX THINGS!
I totally was team CHEEK POCKETS, but I don't know now. I think I'm switzerland.
NO TAKING SIDES FOR ME!
John's letter almost made me cry :file:

Good shit.

holy god, drama!!!
i'm still crossing my fingers for a happy ending though.
please don't let me down, girl
<333

oh no! ali's moving!!

i want her and john to make up so badly!!

update soon please!..love this story!

wow, that was so much, thrown into one chapter
it was pretty great
it sucks that she has to leave, but after all that just happened, it might be easier to leave at that point

I wonder how many people would actually be sad if amber was hit by a bus. it's kinda mean, but it's kind of appropriate for her at the same time
and I think that it'd be pretty funny

anyways,
that was a great update

that gave me butterflies.

that gave me butterflies.

So, this is amazing.
I don't want it to end
YAY SEQUEL?!
I'm still team CHEEK POCKETS!
Just saying.

I'm not going to lie,
if I was in her situation...
I would most likely choose suicide.

amber pisses me off.
i don't think girls should have sex with other girl's boyfriends.
lol

but they need to get back together!
update soon, love
<333

i really hope they make up soon
god i hate amber!

loved this chapter
cant wait to read more"

I loveee thiss. ;D

John and Ali really need to like make up or break up
preferably make up, but its your story
because to me it seems like it's not good for either of them

I'm interested to see where this little thing Kennedy has comes into play
it could be good or bad, we'll have to see
I think it'll make for an interesting story

Anyways, it was a nice update
great job!

I liked this chapter a lot.
Kennedy's such a sweetheart.
CHEEK POCKETS.
I'm am team CHEEK POCKETS for this story :file:
Now don't punch me.
But I love Kennedy. A lot.
More than I love John.