We Fit Together Like a Car Crash - Comments

Beki...that's your name right??
I think your story has a really different and unique plot, i enjoy it, its not everyday you read about a girl from the orchestra. Her having acute asthma is not a really good thing, you have it? That can be really scary. I must admire the fact that you are including yourself in the story, so that must mean that all her reactions are the way that you probably would? Am i right? I think it's so cool.
For some constructive critsism, your writing style is pretty good, it makes the story flow and your chapter layout is really good. A tip of critsism i will give is: Set the scene during dialogue.
So whilst Joe glances away from you what does he look like, and when you look at Joe what room closes in on you as you feel weak in the knees? Those sort of things...
You lost readers, because your last chapter was a tad grown up so the younger kids will stop reading, though you still have readers, well, at least you have me. (:

This chapter: Wow. Now this was written great and i am a sap with stories so my heart was aching when it 'went black' imagine how Joe must be freaking out not knowing where she is? When he finds out she passed out...i hope that is the push he needs to ask her out. I wonder if he even knows she has asthma, because i know Nick does know. Very good.

Update soon, put me out of my mind, keep smiling knowing you are talented!

-Tay

Yes, I agree with the comment above. Joe needs to ask her out already. :)

More soon.

oh gosh, joe just needs to ask her out already haha
and i found a kinda cool picture, but i dunno if it's what you were looking for?
here's the link: http://img.wallpaperstock.net:81/car-crash-wallpapers_5294_1024x768.jpg

Hurricane.Of.Dreams, please don't hurt me
i swear i'm nothing like that.. LOL!
in fact, that's my first bitch role here on mibba.. hahah..

anyway, i'm finally baaaaaaaaaack
you have to update soon..

I am going to hurt those two fan girls . Once Joe kisses Beki I will be sooo happy.

I love how I just waltz in and act like everything is normal. That's pretty darn cool.

I GET TO COME BACK?! YAY!

But the hitting the head thing- epic fail.
and by fail i mean freaking awesome :)

Plz don't tell me Joe will touch Beki's but just to tickle her. Never have him do that.

I like this chapter a lot because it gives us a glimpse into her background. Also you really see Joe's feelings for her which is sooo sweet.

I can't wait for the next chapter and i hope it comes out soon!

I love this beki and Joe need to stop being stubborn about their feelings

i thought of iCarly too ^.^

soooo.. did joe see that last bit in the end of the chapter?
cause i really hope that he did..

Aww random dancing is the best. :D (iCarly anyone?)

Sia. Aweful person, cool name.

I would love some more updates pretty plz!

I love this story beki cause i wish i could be in the band.

But anyway. Random Dancing=amazing.

Sia= nausea. I do not like her. I'd get a shotgun and go after her if i could.

But seriously girl. you need to update more often. I can't wait for more :D

Haha i like the random dancing, but then he starts flirting with that other girl ugh! UPDATE SOON! :D

I LOVE IT! BUT WHEN CAN THEY JUST START DATING?!?!

I adore this story and can't wait to see what happenes. So you need to update. RIGHT NOW!

Why are you still reading this comment! GO UPDATE.

Well then, I guess I'm a comment huh?
I thought you like, disappeared.
Well I guess not :)
AND THAT'S WHY YOU SHOULD UPDATE THIS AMAZING STORY!

update soon. Joe is soo cute : )

Aw, Joe is cute! :]

grrrr.. i hate those four already -__-

this story is pure awesomeness.. can't wait for the tour (and all the dramas that come with it)