October 4th, 2008 at 11:03pm
-squeals-
How did I miss that you had posted this?
I friggin loved this the first time round that I read it, I think it's one of my favorite things you've ever written - which is saying a lot because I love everything you write =D
I did notice you changed things a little since you e-mailed it to me, but I think it's improved it - if it's possible to improve perfection xD
Gah - the plot, the characters the everything!
It's just superb.
Different to a lot of other frerards too, which is very refreshing to see - but I already know you're so original <3
I'm remembering just how much I loved your writing style, it's just so clear and lets the reader feel the emotions you're describing.
I expecially loved the line: "But still, uncertainty ate away at me like a parasite"
Lovely work.
Very, very nice, looking forward to reading more.
Love Beth
xoxo
I must leave now and read the second chapter. This story deserves ever comment it can get.