Vampire Auction - Comments

=) more please!!! lol i'm addicted!

This story is REALLY REALLY good!!!!!!
Please update soon!!

Yummy! I love it its well writen and only has one or two mistakes. Though all your doing is telling, when you should be showing more. For example, when you discribed the coffin and how it was black with silver latches. Thats showing. hears a rule that makes all writing better; SHOW DON"T TELL. I want to know what the vampire looks like or maybe the sisster and the narrator. Please. Your events are wonderful and one other thing. The longer the better. Really. I prefere longer stories.

=) Yours truely,
Tasha

P.S. I love it.!!!! It's was wonderful and exsiting and write more please! I'm not trying to be mena I promise! its just something I learned in Creative Writing class.

i LOVED this story! i hope more come out soon.