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  • Rosebud

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    wow
    that was really good!!
    i loved it!
    November 6th, 2007 at 07:58pm
  • mon_visage

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    Wow, that was amazing.
    I loved how you compared their love to the ocean.
    Really powerful and complex imagery.
    And I personally loved the ending.     In Love
    October 29th, 2007 at 03:09am
  • Carlyumz

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    mores pages of sheer genious, the semantic field was just brilliant- you really conveyed the horrors of the ocean and transformed them into their 'relationship'
    The metaphors of drowning was beautiful and the ending, gah i adored it as usual :)
    September 13th, 2007 at 10:10pm
  • carcinogenic.

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    You're sweet. :]
    Thanks a lot!
    July 9th, 2007 at 08:53am
  • GenRage

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    Aw!
    This was amazing <3
    July 8th, 2007 at 12:35am
  • carcinogenic.

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    Aww, thank you soso much, everybody...
    You're all so nice. :]]
    I love you. &#9829;
    May 19th, 2007 at 07:07pm
  • Chibi

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    That was beautiful.....different, yet perfectly familiar. Your prose style is amazing. I wish I could just let it all out like that.......
    May 18th, 2007 at 08:49am
  • RachelTorres

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    It didn't seem like it was going to end there at all. I loved it though.
    Your writing is amazing, the descriptions are perfect. Endless without being overkill.
    And the metaphors... incredible. I was soo fascinated with the ocean and pirate metaphors.
    Nice.
    And you used the word anesthetized, which is my favorite word... although I don't know why.
    xoxo
    May 17th, 2007 at 12:42am
  • KranK

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    wow. i was so surprised to see it ended there...
    it was beautifully written.
    So poetic-sounding.
    You have amazing talent. I could, like, feel their feelings while I was
    reading. call me crazy...<3
    May 16th, 2007 at 09:29pm
  • IdealisticAtBest

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    That was fantastic.
    The metaphors about the ocean were amazing.
    gkjgnfjnagj
    I loved it.
    May 15th, 2007 at 01:24am
  • crazy.beautiful

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    that was amazingly beautiful. i like how it's an open ending too...would be cool to know what does happen when they actually do wake up....i love how you relate his emotions to the ocean, me gusta!
    May 14th, 2007 at 10:16pm
  • carcinogenic.

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    You guys are cuuuute. :]]
    I love you all.

    P.S.
    -You have an awesome signature, Zeely. [Like usual.]

    YOU GUYS ARE THE BEST! :O
    &#9829;
    May 14th, 2007 at 10:14pm
  • doll face.

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    Jesus, that was intense.

    I'm running out of words now to describe your work, but that was beeeeautiful. And your description amazes me.

    Hohum. :]

    Ilyy!&#9829;
    May 14th, 2007 at 06:55pm
  • Reverse Phsycology

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    eh
    good ending
    gee wudnt leave tho, wud he?
    May 14th, 2007 at 06:25pm
  • sugarbones.

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    well, I loved the ending.
    Really.
    and i love the whole drowning part, or the horror of the ocean, and then at the end the waves are peaceful.
    its like, its been transformed. the ocean, that is.
    ehh, i'll shut up now.
    :]]
    May 14th, 2007 at 05:56pm
  • fallenleaves

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    Aww no you can't end it there! I need more, it's so good!
    May 14th, 2007 at 02:31pm
  • Zaraza

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    Ahh!! I loved it, loved it, loved it!!

    I have no idea how you write these things... You're a fucking genius, you better get published soon!!

    Lurve you,

    Elena.
    May 14th, 2007 at 09:28am
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