Breathing Underwater - Comments

wow
that was really good!!
i loved it!

Wow, that was amazing.
I loved how you compared their love to the ocean.
Really powerful and complex imagery.
And I personally loved the ending.

mores pages of sheer genious, the semantic field was just brilliant- you really conveyed the horrors of the ocean and transformed them into their 'relationship'
The metaphors of drowning was beautiful and the ending, gah i adored it as usual :)

You're sweet. :]
Thanks a lot!

Aw!
This was amazing <3

Aww, thank you soso much, everybody...
You're all so nice. :]]
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That was beautiful.....different, yet perfectly familiar. Your prose style is amazing. I wish I could just let it all out like that.......

It didn't seem like it was going to end there at all. I loved it though.
Your writing is amazing, the descriptions are perfect. Endless without being overkill.
And the metaphors... incredible. I was soo fascinated with the ocean and pirate metaphors.
Nice.
And you used the word anesthetized, which is my favorite word... although I don't know why.
xoxo

wow. i was so surprised to see it ended there...
it was beautifully written.
So poetic-sounding.
You have amazing talent. I could, like, feel their feelings while I was
reading. call me crazy...<3

That was fantastic.
The metaphors about the ocean were amazing.
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I loved it.

that was amazingly beautiful. i like how it's an open ending too...would be cool to know what does happen when they actually do wake up....i love how you relate his emotions to the ocean, me gusta!

You guys are cuuuute. :]]
I love you all.

P.S.
-You have an awesome signature, Zeely. [Like usual.]

YOU GUYS ARE THE BEST! :O
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Jesus, that was intense.

I'm running out of words now to describe your work, but that was beeeeautiful. And your description amazes me.

Hohum. :]

Ilyy!&#9829;

eh
good ending
gee wudnt leave tho, wud he?

well, I loved the ending.
Really.
and i love the whole drowning part, or the horror of the ocean, and then at the end the waves are peaceful.
its like, its been transformed. the ocean, that is.
ehh, i'll shut up now.
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Aww no you can't end it there! I need more, it's so good!

Ahh!! I loved it, loved it, loved it!!

I have no idea how you write these things... You're a fucking genius, you better get published soon!!

Lurve you,

Elena.