Rainbows in the Gasoline - Comments

I liked this. The ending was pretty unexpected, which was amazing. It's simple and yet it's complicated at the same time, if that makes any sense.
I know this isn't a great comment but that's all I can think of to say about this story.

great one-shot, powerful. i loved the ending, such a great twist and i think it'll stay with me for a while. I loved the way you set it all up and then just...switched to reality. Again, amazing.

Pteehee...funny, Isa. xDDD -likes it lots-

pure brilliance!

This story is really good. The writing is amazing.
I like how you started it and then turned the whole story around at the end.
I really liked how you described everything and your use of words ;]
Awesome, I loved it!

<3CyanideandHappiness

Wow. Great job. I was wondering where it was all going, but you tied it together really well.

Wow, this was amazing.
Completely and utterly original.
The end was so unexpected. I actually almost started crying.
Pure brilliance.
I really loved the last line; it was what nearly made me cry.

BTW, that story you commented on, I changed it a little, so there's more description in it now. :D

Not one hundred percent what I had in mind, but I like that you took such an interesting spin on my original prompt. This is wonderful.

Wow. I love the concept! You really showed your innovativness in this one.
I like it how the joy of everyday shopping turned Zita both psychically and materially into a ruin. I'm a sucker for ideas like this one, so I really enjoyed it. I agree with Sara, that the transition was to rough and rushed. But I guess that's the way it happens these days. One day you're the king of the world and the other a forgotten scamp.
You've done an amazing job!

Yeah, okay, speechless for the first time in a long while. I loved it. People think of such things as petty and boring, but look what you've done with a simple prompt! I didn't expect this story to go the way you made it go. It started so "normally", like a usual routine of sorts and grew like that until, just as fast as I got to imagine it, the fantasy dispersed and grew into cold, hard reality.

All that was left now was a Filipino street child nicknamed Zita by the doctors who took her from her mother, who died right after giving birth, her ratty clothes soaked to the bone and frail body reeking of a thousand days spent without bathing, her hands grasping at the old wooden cart containing the leftover food she salvaged from the large community garbage cans and the remnants of her fantasy.

And right on cue, a well-known hollow, aching feeling settled in the pits of her stomach as hot, salty streams descended her gaunt and dirty face.

The ending was brilliant. I did spot some flaws, though - like you've switched through the images too fast and it gave me this rushed feeling, but it definitely didn't harm the story-line. The ending, as I already said it, was pure brilliance to me. It was simple, but powerful and wrapped the story up perfectly.

Um, the story's finished. It's a one-shot. :D

But thank you very much for your comment and your wonderful, excessive use of smileys..:P

Wooo!! What an amazing start to a story i'm totaly hooked all ready keep it up u gienuss. I am completly as your power with this story.

Rock on

wel done